| 2020-12-02 21:21:42 |
Olivias Innocence
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A couple of grammatical errors sprinkled throughout, but it didn't take away from your fantastic story. You definitely are a skilled writer. Polish up the mistakes by having a fresh pair of eyes edit your material. Wonderful job! |
| 2020-12-08 07:45:06 |
My girlfriends daughter Madison
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You have a good story here but it needs work in regards to spacing. You jammed everything together. Take Impax's advice about the paragraphs between character dialogue. I had to reread a couple times because I got lost between who was speaking. Not bad but could be better. |
| 2020-12-07 19:09:23 |
Preacher’s Daughters Part 2 Modified
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Your writing is top-notch. I appreciate the details you add. Keep up the good work. |
| 2020-12-06 16:50:32 |
The Bite
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A nice and refreshing tale. Good writing. Looking forward to where this goes. |
| 2020-12-06 17:29:01 |
The Bite Part 2
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Very erotic. I like how de***********ive you are. You don't leave any detail to chance. Great work. |